Sentences to story excersize

Group: Yazeed Alali, Almuhannad Aljahdali, Nick Carroll-Anderson

1.       The first idea covered is how the story will go and if the story was in a logical order to begin with. Our group felt the sentences chronologically made sense. We felt our job mainly was to tie loose ends. We gave the main character a name make the story feel more personalized. We gave her a reason not to buy the bag. Finally we added a conclusion of how she handled not wanting the skirt.

2.       The introductory paragraph had to introduce the main character and put her into the store. The theme of the story revolves around the girl wanting something and eventually giving in on gluttony. We finish the story with a contradicting conclusion in that we have the girl give it away which is nice little life lesson.

3.        The first paragraph introduces the main character and puts her in the store. The next paragraph introduces the skirt and she decides she wants but does not make a purchase. The third paragraph she returns to buy the skirt succeeds that time. The conclusion paragraph includes her not wanting the skirt and that she gives it to her mother.

4.       The conclusion has the girl finding out she doesn't want the skirt and can't return it. The them of her indulgence is given a morale ending when she gives the skirt to her mother. The morale being that giving can be better then receiving.

The girl and her new skirt

                As Hannah walked by the window of a Macy’s, she peered in and a skirt caught her eye. She liked the bright coloring but the price scared her. She knew it wasn’t in her budget but felt she had to investigate. Hannah walked into the store and towards her dream.

                In the Hannah viewed the skirt. The skirt is new and the color is neon. She looked at the price tag on the skirt which was three hundred dollars. The money for the skirt was her pocket and she knew she should not take it out. The money burned in her pocket as she wanted the skirt. The shop was open only for another twenty minutes and knew she had to make up her mind. Another customer was looking at the skirt being the only one left in stock. “Whatever!” she exclaimed as grabbed the skirt off the shelf and brought to the cashier. While she was waiting in line the cashier closed the register as she hoped to pay. She let a sigh and said, “Bummer, maybe I don’t need it.” She decided against buying and placed the skirt back on the shelf and left the boutique.

                Even though she didn’t want to think about it anymore, the skirt was still on her mind. She felt relentlessness as she didn’t return spend that much. The next day she was in the area and she glimpsed at the skirt.  Hannah walked through for another close look. She finally just grabbed the skirt and walked quickly to the cashier and made her purchase. The weight was off her shoulders. “This feels good,” she smiled and walked away full of elation.

                When she took it home, she was excited to try it on. She puts on the skirt and looks and herself the mirror. Disappointment. The outfit looked awful. She tried on again with another top. It looked no better with any of the other clothes she tried with it. “What now. I can’t return it because it was on sale,” she thought to herself. She knew someone who would really appreciate the skirt. Her mother lit up with joy as Hannah gave the skirt away.